VSS 027 - Eyes on the Prize


Eyes on the Prize

 

Very Short Story (VSS) 027

 

He was dazzled by her hair.

 

And by the way she carried herself with poise. 

 

He was completely focused on her.

 

He noticed everything - every crease in her short dress, every movement of her small golden clutch, every expression on her face and even the frown that appeared out of nowhere.

 

His eyes never left her

 

He had learnt his lessons, not in the school, but in real life. He got trained on-the-job with no retakes.

 

As a pick-pocketer aiming for specialization in ladies handbags; his number one learning was 'Eyes on the Prize'

 

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This story was interesting to write. I started out with a one-sided romantic angle in mind with a shy guy infatuated with a beautiful girl. But as you can see, right in the end, the story took an unexpected turn and became something else altogether.


Its fun and satisfying to write such a story. Amusing to see such an unplanned twist coming from inside. 😊


Quick Note: Very Short Stories are max. 99 word stories that i am writing, as part of my writing resolutions for 2017. My target is to write at least 50 VSS this year - about 12-13 every quarter. 

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